O… confused mind
Never be a blind
Don’t take it as giant
Just chew it as mint
I have nothing for you dear
Except worries and fear
So cheer up with your near
Will always have my prayer
Life is not a cream
As we see in dream
It is like a stream
Which is full of scream
But it is true ,no doubt, I will keep
In my heart and never will sweep.
1 അഭിപ്രായം:
DEAR JASEE,
You did it in a better way than the former one. Third stanza attracted me more as you made it more rhythmic than the other stanzas. The simile you used cream is very appropriate for life as 99.9% of men and women think life as cream lifelong, which make life vain. Always look before you leap so that you never need to write the poem-confused mind, as your poems are reflection of your mind. Keep on writing poems and stories. I expect more and more good works like this. God bless you.
Praseetha
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